Chapter 14
All I can say is thank you for getting me a rating, for everyone that left a review I really appreciate it, i'm going to do a lot more chapters (hopefully hehe) and write better. apologies for not uploading any chapters in quite a while, i'm a bit pressed with school work so the current stability with updates is a little off, but please do expect that within a week ill hopefully be updating daily, and maybe even more! Additionally, my ink stone was a little bit messed up so I couldn't write anyways, but
LIST OF IMPROVEMENTS:
- Improve the all around writing quality
- Describe the landscapes and beasts better i.e: in the forest
- Explain his cultivation more (whoopsies)
- Make breakthroughs more detailed and describe the flow of heavens and earth
- GIVE PEOPLE NAMES (this is very important, so uh... yeah, fixing that fast, which is also why I made him blow all his money)
- Make money more reasonable (he got too rich too fast)
- Writing his progress at the end of a chapter (if you've read the manga "back from the immortal world", which is also a light novel here, it explains his progress at the end of the chapter, so imma do that too)
- Improve his character (so he wont be so clueless, in a kind of sorts)
- To not say 'as' too much (I usually go, "it was a hard battle, as he was a grand total of two realms below the beast." which is just annoying as you keep reading, so imma start using due to, since, caused by, etc.)
- Strengthen his bases (I need to make it so that he has the ultimate base, although it wont be too crazy, kind of like Qin nan, from peerless battle spirit, when he starts forming cores, or his martial soul
- Finally, To make better endings or keep it the same (all i've been doing is cliff hanging you guys, so i'm open to ending suggestions, or should I just keep it the same?)
Additionally, a quick question:
Do you want me to continue doing update chapters? or are they annoying?
Also, I just want to say that there ARE martial skills, or martial techniques (which do you prefer?) and that they are accessible to those who are in the qi cultivation realm, since its 'solidified' into a visual state.
Thanks for reading the chapter and enjoy the next chapter!
If you're reading this when there is no chapter after this, give it an hour after this one, and if not, i'll be asleep, and i'll write in the morning (i'm Aussie)